Hi Sophie and Mya, this is a great story, I was really keen to keep reading and find out what happened. Just remember to always use capital letters for people's names and place names like New York for example, and use commas and full stops where there is pauses. Good job!!
hi it is chloe i was reading this and it was getting really interesting she found the dad and then the story ended what happened to the mum and where was the dad the whole time.
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Hi Sophie and Mya, this is a great story, I was really keen to keep reading and find out what happened. Just remember to always use capital letters for people's names and place names like New York for example, and use commas and full stops where there is pauses. Good job!!
ReplyDeletecool I love the story
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hey sophie i think you definatly beat your goal it was a really good story and i want to hear more of your stories
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hi it is chloe
ReplyDeletei was reading this and it was getting really interesting she found the dad and then the story ended what happened to the mum and where was the dad the whole time.